My goal is sentences with troy. I have chosen this goal because I mostly use long sentences. I am getting better bye doing this by doing it a bit more interesting so I can get the reader even more hooked on it.
In Troys writing group we looked at a picture of a heard of fish. My writing is about a shark trying to kidnap all the fish so they can have all the fish in the world. My hero is a dolphin called shinny, plus dolphins kick sharks but.
Feedback & Feedforward:
I think you did well using humor to hook the reader in to reading your story, you also did well in making sure your using the correct puncuation.
I think I could of done better by put a few more shorter sentences. Next time I could also use some juicy words. I think I am improving in my writing this term because I have learnt other ways of making made up or a true story: Narrative, Recount, Report, and a whole lot more.